Prompt: Pop culture has recently become dominated by cultural appropriation, defined as “the adoption of elements of one culture by members of a different cultural group, especially if the adoption is of an oppressed people’s cultural elements by members of the dominant culture” (Yasmim). Critics call out celebrities from Kylie Jenner to Madonna for perpetuating the phenomenon, maintaining that appropriation encourages racist tendencies. Can a culture be stolen? When does cultural appreciation become cultural appropriation? Can cultural appropriation become racism? ****Write a paragraph argument response that effectively defends, qualifies, or refutes this statement:“To appropriate one’s culture is not to embrace it, but to mimic it. It’s making a fashion of someone else’s heritage and religion.” You are to then RESPOND to one classmate. Your response should be very respectful and critical in nature. Your job is to evaluate their position, the quality and variety of evidence that they provide, and if their commentary supports the evidence and is sophisticatedly woven in with the evidence. Provide a thorough justification for your analysis/score. Afterwards, you will provide a score of 1-9 for that student. *Everything cannot be correct, so your job is to help them improve their analysis and writing by finding mistakes and discussing those mistakes in a respectful tone and manner. Your response should be a minimum of 4 sentences. You will be graded based on you posting your precis and your evaluation of your peer’s argument response. After your have received your feedback, modify your argument response and submit to me on Google Classroom as a final draft. |
Tasheirra Sanders
8/29/2017 10:01:01 pm
Once for halloween, I dressed as Pocahontas because I thought it was a cute costume. At the time I didn’t know that it was culture appropriation, and I’m sure I have done it many other times as well. To begin, it is my estimation that appropriating one’s culture respectfully is to embrace it. It is okay to embrace another culture under the circumstances that you are respecting it and not mimicking it for a stylish or any other reason. From my personal experience, I have been a suspect of appropriating the indigenous culture by dressing as Pocahontas, and it is considered to be disrespectful. This affirms that you should not use one’s culture because you think it is stylish or cute. Imagine that you did a project for school and a student from your class copies your project. She gets a better grade than you but all she did was copy you. That’s exactly how someone feels when you appropriate their culture, it’s like you are stealing their culture not caring about the oppression they may have faced with their culture. However, if you are respectfully embracing a different culture, then it is considered to be okay. For example, a girl invites her friend to her family’s indigenous celebration. The friend shows up dressed in a indigenous costumes and everyone around is fine with it. This undoubtedly demonstrates that respectfully embracing one’s culture is acceptable.No one would be mad if you support their culture when you show that you understand what their culture is about. Know the reason they wear their hair a type of way or why they wear the things that they wear. Opposers would defend the notion that people should not culture appropriate at all, even if it is respectfully because it is stealing like stealing a culture. However, they have not considered the fact that people often exchange culture and ideas. It is how modern day was created; by the sharing of cultures. People will find something they like about a culture and if they really study it and respect it then it is not a problem. They also have not considered that people have the freedom to wear anything they want. Even if it is appropriating a culture, no one can do anything about it. Ultimately, it is okay to embrace one’s culture under the circumstances that you are respecting the culture and you are not mimicking it for stylistic reasons. So, if you are thinking about wearing something from a culture just for the looks, think about the meaning of it to the people in that culture. You wouldn't want anyone stealing your ideas from your heritage, so be mindful of what you do with other people’s ideas.
chanteasa porter-clayton
8/30/2017 04:52:06 pm
In predominantly white colleges, the Deans allow the students to have race parties. A race party is where you dress as a racial group. such as Native Americans, African Americans, Hispanics/ Latino(a). Culture appropriation is negative. It has been noted that predominantly white colleges around the country have offensive parties. The students throw party representing other races. they wear offensive clothes such as for African American they dress as thugs. The Deans do not stop the students from hosting parties. They allow it to happen. The race parties are disrespectful towards the people of the race. The party shows a sign of racism. Opponents would imply minorities colleges have the same parties. Although that may be true minorities are oppressed. When minorities attend the parties they don't go to the extreme and paint their faces white. They dress differently and speak a different way, but they aren't offensive. Culture appropriation is defensive and wrong.
Kemani
8/30/2017 08:38:43 pm
I feel like your whole eassy is just on your exigency. If the whole partt thing was suppose your exigency it needs to be shorter. Try to follow a argument paper. You didnt state the claim from the paper dr.attis gave us (if you dont know what im talking about ill show you tommro) also capitalize your letters that need it. Your scholarly diction is good. Also i dont really get how the party things goes into culture appropriate. Maybe you want to use that as a example of it and go into details to prove your position.
Kemani Kenneybrew
8/30/2017 05:16:24 pm
If your a friend attending a Indain wedding you'll wear a Odni to be respectful. Right? Or, would you not care of the culture and wear whatever? To appropriate one's culture is not to embrace it, but to mimic it. It's making a fashion of someone else's heritage and religion.
Necye Griggs
8/30/2017 06:40:39 pm
You're off to a good start here. I love how you used your rhetorical questions, and you were very detailed. Which is fine because Dr. Attis loves words. Don't forget that your last sentence is in there twice and to correct your punctuations.
Kemani
8/30/2017 06:55:57 pm
Thanks amd i will
Necye Griggs
8/30/2017 06:25:36 pm
A black girl that attended J.C.L.C. was placed in a room with a mixture of other girls of a different race, white. One of the white girls were braiding another white girls hair. When she finished the black girl asked her would she braid her hair. The white girl responded and confessed that she only knew how to braid white hair. To appropriate one's culture is not to embrace it, but to mimic it. It's making a fashion of someone else's heritage and religion. It seems obvious to the writer that cultural appropriation could either be acceptable or unacceptable. In fact, Malik articulates, appropriation is not theft but are messy interactions. This means that although, the white girl only knew how to braid white, there is a way to go about addressing things. She could have simply refused by saying no, rather than stating that she only knew how to braid white hair. Braiding is apart of the Black culture. However different races learned from each other. Struggle was built on the demand for equal rights and universal values. Racism wasn't important to majority of people with different race. Therefore, they were willing to overcome these obstacles together in unity. Oppsers allege. "It took a social struggle to bring about change." While this might seem true, the evidence proves racisim defined who became the cultural icon. Racism is still in existence although many believe otherwise. To conclude, yes I understand that racism is a problem. However, racism is most likely going to continue to occur. Racism is the cause of cultural appropriation. Racism should stop in order to bring cultural appropriation to an end because nobody owns a culture.
Kemani
8/30/2017 07:04:38 pm
I love your scholarly words, i dont know if put in a counterclaim cause i was somewhat following up with dr.attis argument paper she gave us last period. I love your background story amd how your main forcus is towards racism in our culture appropriation.
Destiny Wilkins & Dailyn Scott
8/31/2017 08:53:24 am
You could change your first sentence. Maybe put "she was placed in a racially diverse room." Also you should maybe stop typing like you talk. Use a more scholarly tone.I also think you went off topic a little. I know racism and cultural appropriation can tie together but you didn't really explain. You need a purpose which is a call to action. What do you want the reader to do after they're done reading. Hope you take everything in to consideration.
Tasheirra Sanders
8/30/2017 08:13:13 pm
Think of a better exigency, I don't think your exigency match the culture appropriation prompt. I don't think we were suppose to use the text as evidence. I'm not sure, but in class a couple of weeks ago Dr.Attis said that our evidence would always come from personal experiences and prior knowledge. I'm also confused about what your argument is, you send mixed messages. I'm not sure if you included your purpose but I can't identify it. Write it so that it's obvious to the reader.
Necye Griggs
8/30/2017 08:50:12 pm
Thanks, I'll take it into consideration.
Ayanna Prather
8/30/2017 10:10:22 pm
Coachella is an arts and music festival held annually in California. People from all over plan their wardrobes of trendy clothing to match the Indie music that will play there. Everyone there is majority white and they are covered in Bindis, Dashikis, and Native American Headdresses.They are having the time of their life. They can parade around in the same clothes of the oppressed people of America who were kicked out of this very land and who are constantly told that this is not their country because it's trendy; It does not have meaning to them. It seems obvious to the writer that appropriating one's culture is not to embrace it but mimic it by making a fashion of their religion and heritage. To begin, the author has observed that a lot of women take on the characteristics and features of African American girls to mimic the beauty attached to being a black girl. For years, black girls have been criticized or laughed at for their darker skin. Nowadays you have tanning lotions that go from "light to deep dark color." I see non black or brown girls darker than me these days. This evidence affirms that these girls are not here to embrace the blackness but they are here to mimic our dark skin because its a trend. They don't get to live with the fact that the history of our skin has gotten us killed, lynched, beaten, spit at, treated as if we were dogs, but they only live with the fact that they have a tan for the next few weeks. Furthermore, from the writer's personal experience, white women are constantly seen wearing Native American Headdresses and pieces of clothings due to it being a fashion statement. Where were they when the Native Americans were forced on the Trail of Tears, out of their own land, treated as slaves, and died? Where were they when they faced unemployment and low housing? This undoubtedly demonstrates that you can not embrace culture when you are unaware of the oppression and struggles that come with it. You can not dress up in their clothes, look like them, be apart of their culture if you are ignorant to the struggles, the rest of it. You are playing dress up to look "cute." You are mimicking a group of people and make a fashion statement. Some may argue that embracing a culture can be done by mimicking their heritage and religion. What they have not considered is you can mimic a heritage by dressing a certain way or adopting characteristics of a certain culture but not accept it.You can darken your skin, wear a thousand dashikis, but never embrace the struggle behind it. You can copy ways and still hate who the other race is.You can believe that their characteristics look good on you but not them. That is not "embracing." In closing, cultural appropriation isn't embracing a culture but to mimicking it. You have to educate yourself on the culture whether it be the struggles or what makes a certain race a race before you can embrace it. You can't just copy what you see. Until then, it falls under cultural appropriation.
Ayanna Prather
9/1/2017 10:11:06 am
Can someone edit this please? Thank you!
Crystal Walker
9/1/2017 05:38:30 pm
Wonderful arguement response, I really enjoyed it. In the sentence, "You cannot just up in their clothes, look like them, be a part of their culture if you are ignorant to the struggles, the rest of it," I do not understand the ending when you say the rest of it maybe you should better word it? I don't believe this is required but maybe put in the ending the authors purpose because you were already giving more commentary. Other then that I don't see anything else.
Ayanna Prather
9/1/2017 06:53:29 pm
Thank You! I have some ideas of what I want to add!
Jahkyah Harris
8/30/2017 10:28:32 pm
I was always known as ghetto and ratchet when I have in my corn rows. I was always saw as unprofessional for taming my natural hair. Soon as someone that isn't black wears my hair style to make it a popular thing they are praised. Cultures should be respected, not taken and made fun of just to make the group to whom the culture belong to feel disrespected. Cultural appreciation becomes cultural appropriation when the culture is being disrespected. When you are mocking a culture, or someone of that culture feels disrespected that appropriating it. When you are appreciating a culture you're being open to a new environments. For instance, if someone of that culture invited you to an event, and they wanted you to dress a certain way so they will feel respected. A culture can be stolen, when it is stolen by a privileged group of who's making it into their own. A privileged group such as white people are not called out for stealing cultures except praised for taking a culture and giving it a new name.On Instagram I had a picture of me with Bantu knots and someone told me that they were called space buns, which i knew they weren't. I googled Space Buns and a white artist named, Miley Cyrus, Took the hair style and gave it a new name, that's when everyone replaced the name bantu knots, with space buns. Boxer Braids is a perfect example of this, Kylie Jenner, took the style of corn rows and gave it a new name. People on the opposing side may say that people should be able to wear anything they want, and express it how ever they like. However they have not considered that it can be used in a discourteous manner. . Cultural Appropriation becomes racism when the mockery becomes oppressing. When you are stealing cultures to make another race of people enraged because you're using advantages to persecute another group of people. We embrace our culture to be respected and not made a fool of. We embrace other cultures such as, Indian culture to show respect to the event taking place.
Ayanna Prather
8/31/2017 09:59:37 pm
Hey Jahkyah! First for your opening, I would suggest making it third person. I suggest making it general saying that maybe "all black girls were known for being ghetto and unprofessional.." this can help boost the argument if you mention how it affects the whole community. I suggest revising the beginning of this sentence "Soon as someone that isn't black wears my hair style.." Perhaps by adding "However, As soon as.." I suggest revising all of your first person pronouns to our. Speak in third person. In one sentence, I suggest replacing that with then. I suggest adding one of Dr.Attis's sentence frames and making this statement a general claim like so: "(It is the writers belief...or the writer affirms that )Cultural appreciation becomes cultural appropriation when the culture is being disrespected. After this sentence,I would give a.situation in which culture is disrespected versus respectful. You did the respectful part. This directly pairs with your claim. In this sentence "when it is stolen by a privileged group of who's making it into their own." I would rephrase this to A culture can be stolen specifically by a privileged group of people who try and make.it their own. I would try to find a more dramatic word for stolen if possible just to really add to the tone. That's just me though. I would suggest adding another sentence frame before you get into what you saw on instragram. in fact, I would use this "the writer has observed from personal experience that privileged people are praised for stealing cultures." I would actually move this up after the claim. You have a lot of great commentary but After you move that sentence up, delete "When you are appreciating a culture you're being open to a new environments." You have a strong argument. This isnt needed. Instead of a perfect example, "another example". For your Space Buns and Boxer Braids example, i would say something about how they are not only praised but accredited for the same hairstyles that are deamed unprofessional on us instead of just they give it a new name. Maybe how this leads to #whitegirlsdoitbetter. Then add a sentence about how this disrespects us as black girls to know that our culture is not only stolen from us but we are being attacked when they say it doesnt look good on us. Its offensive. Wrong. Unfair. Try to do that in about 3 sentences after the examples. I think this builds a stronger argument. Talk about how now black girls think they aren't enough in their own culture. Pull at all the heart strings you can to really convince someone, in this case Dr.Attis. If your claim is that cultural Appropiation becomes appropiation when its disrespected, your counter claim should align with the fact its not disrespectful. Its mimicking to embrace the culture. Then, you could clap back with the fact they want to look like us but not appreviatethat we are black and are still racist towards us. They want our hair but they don't want to be us. Associated with us. Something on the aligns of that. I say take all the fluff out amd build this strong argument girl. You have some great things to work with here. Contact me if you need anything else!
Ciara Dean
8/30/2017 10:57:47 pm
We live in a country that is essentially a Melting Pot of different cultures races ethnicities in religions. So it is no surprise that people would appropriate other cultures or even assimilate to the majority culture. However, just because culture appropriation has a high chance of occurring in a diverse area, that doesn't mean that it is completely Justified. culture appropriation can be very offensive to the appropriated culture due to the ignorance and lack of support from the appropriators. It is the author's assertion that to appropriate one's culture is not to mimic one's culture but to imitate it. However, if people from other cultures should be able to imitate other cultures if they are culturally sensitive. According to in the 1900s, it was very common for members of the white majority to steal and reproduce the music of the black minority. During these times segregation and mistreatment of blackswas very prevalent. Seing that blacks could not get the better and higher paying jobs that whites could, they resorted to the music industry and found some success there. That is until the more socially accepted whites essentially ripped-off music created by the black minorities. This is an example of an another culture not mimicking the appropriate culture but embracing and copying it. And in them imitating and stealing black music such as Blues and Rock and Roll, they not only appropriated the black culture but they completely ignored the elements of oppression that led to the creation of the music. Additionally, according to the writer's personal experience, many people within minority cultures support people from other cultures imitating their culture because they often admire the fact that someone from another culture can embrace elements of theirs. One could argue that everyone should be able to do whatever they want and imitate anyone's culture at their own discretion. The only problem with this would be that there are certain elements of other cultures such as hairstyles, music, and attire that had cultural significance. Hence why it can be perceived as offensive or someone of it from another culture to wear braids (a protective hairstyle and more "tame" hair style in the black community), Listen to Hip Hop (a form of expression for oppressed minorities), or wear a bindi (worn by Indian women for different stages of life) because it's cute. the solution to this is really appreciated and respect each other in their boundaries.
Dailyn Scott
8/30/2017 11:32:06 pm
I think you should reword your claim because imitate is a synonym for mimic. The sentence after that also needs to be changed because it doesn't make sense. I think you could say "Evidence from the 1900s shows..." I like your counterclaim you pretty much said what I was trying to say just in a better way. Your purpose should be a call to action. Why did you write about this? What did you want to happen after the reader read it? Also, can you edit mine please :)
Ciara Dean
8/31/2017 06:18:28 pm
The reason I used imitate instead of mimick is because mimicking is mocking a culture. And that has a negative connotation which I don't want my claim to have. So to imitate is to copy or reproduce which has the positive connotation that I was trying to get across. I agree that I should definitely rephrase that part about the 1900s like you said. And I will try to make my purpose fit the call to action criteria.
Kemani
8/31/2017 09:37:12 pm
Other then what Ms.Scott said there just something you need to rewrite. Sentence 11 can be worded better. I love your scholarly diction. And your examples are well explain. It might just me but you jumped from hair back to music. I guess im saying word it differently. 😅Idk
Destiny Wilkina
8/30/2017 11:17:33 pm
A black girl wears her natural big Afro. She attends a predominantly white school. Does she get praised for her natural hair? Absolutely not, she gets backlash. People say things like "your hair is to big" and "it's nappy, straighten it." But a white girl with a store bought afro gets a different response. She gets praised and many compliments about her stylish hair. Although most would disagree, my position with cultural appropriation is a no. I don't support the idea of ones culture being mocked by a different cultural group.To begin I've observed that in this year 2017, many white celebs have been called out on cultural appropriation. This evidence affirms that cultural appropriation is a huge thing that is being taken too far. Back in 2016, a white women by the name of Kim Kardashian "created" box braids. She started to claim that style of braids. When in fact they are called cornrows and they originated in Africa. This just goes to show that cultural groups take from an opposing cultural group. Some may argue that people that don't mimic ones culture, but that they are simply supporting and embracing it. However he/she fails to realize when you supporting something, you don't take it and make it your own. You dont claim it as yours and pretend you created it. To conclude I'm standing by opinion and I don't support cultural appropriation. No one wants to be mocked or mimicked by another cultural group.
Crystal Walker
8/31/2017 10:31:07 am
I like your opening I agree with it completely. I believe you should however maybe revise your claim. Maybe something a little more detailed then, " My position with cultural appropriation is a no." I would suggest that you add more commentary after your first evidence. I believe you should revise the sentence, "This just goes to show that cultural groups take from an opposing cultural group." This sentence might be confusing to some. I believe that you should maybe make the last sentence the authors purpose since it seems like that's your purpose for writing the argument
Crystal Walker
8/31/2017 10:32:09 am
And by the way great job.
Dailyn Scott
8/30/2017 11:20:00 pm
There are many black people that are looked down upon for the way they wear their hair or the way they dress. Then the tables turn when a white person duplicates these looks. They get praise for it. Words like "edgy" are used to describe them while the black girl doing the same thing gets the word "ghetto." Just a few days ago I was on the phone with my six year old cousin. She was starting the first grade at a new private school, so I was asking her what her first week was like. She said that she was told she couldn't wear braids and the ones already in her head would have to be taken out. When I visited her school I saw other white girls her age with two french braids in their hair. Most people make a fashion out of other cultures because they take a great interest in that culture. Looking at pictures from various social media platforms you can see people praising other cultures on everyone's timeline. However, it becomes a problem when it is intentionally offensive, or when one group gets praised for something that another is frowned upon for. To begin, I have observed that dashikis have become a trend. A dashiki is a patterned shirt originating from west Africa. Many different races have been seen wearing this fashion trend in the style of a shirt or even a dress. This evidence affirms that there was no harm intended in wearing this ethnic garment. Yes, the dashiki is a symbol of "Africanness", but if it interests another group outside of that culture they should be able to wear it even if it's just to follow a fashion trend. No one is being blatantly disrespected in this situation. In contrast, some people appropriate another culture for notoriety and entertainment. There is evidence of a seventeen year old girl on Instagram that claims she is black even though she isn't. That in itself doesn't sound like a major issue, but the way she attempts to prove she is black is very stereotypical and offensive. She posts videos titled "How to Twerk", she hops around holding large guns with vulgar music playing, and she claims that she is from the hood but she made it out. Not every black person behaves this way, but she feels as if she has to do these things to prove that she is black. This makes other black people look bad, but she has become famous for it. The comments show people laughing at and condoning her behavior. Some may argue that you shouldn't pay attention to or care about what other people do. However, they fail to see that the actions of other people can be emotionally damaging. There are stories behind these different cultural garments or behaviors. These stories represent hardships that some people may feel sensitive about. Overall there is no problem with admiring another culture as long as it is done respectfully and everyone is getting the same treatment for it. I say all of this to say everyone that takes an interest in another culture should not be attacked for it. You can't pick an argument with someone who means no harm just to play the role of a victim, and if you do feel offended by something you should educate the person on a better way to admire the culture instead of attacking them.
Ciara Dean
8/31/2017 06:30:58 pm
-Use But instead of Then for the second sentence to represent a contrast between the two groups of people.
Dailyn Scott
8/31/2017 08:05:23 pm
okay thank you. I'm fixing everything else, but i feel like i said why its a problem when i talk about the stories behind it and i dont want it to sound repetitive.
Angel Crawford
8/30/2017 11:58:11 pm
The topic of one culture adopting or using the elements of another culture can make a conversation go from zero to a hundred really quick. Everyone is not a fan of seeing someone else trying to "rock their culture." They may get defensive because they may see it as others ridiculing them or just simply not staying in their place. Another ethnicity should be able to use another ethnicity, if they are trying to be fashionable and not mimicking it. To begin, the writer has observed how appropriation suggest theft, but relating to culture its a messy interaction. This evidence affirms that someone that chooses to utilize a portion of another person "culture" should be able to do so. The situation starts to get messy because some may think that they own a culture, therefore no one else may be able to use it. It gets even more intense when those who "owns" the culture thinks that people are using their culture to ridicule it. In fact, according to a personal experience the author asserted, a white painter began painting from Emmett Till's photographs of his open casket. It became seen as offensive to the black community to have a white woman depict images of black suffrage. This demonstrates that if a person is not downgrading your culture then they should be allowed to try to be apart of the culture. If they are degrading your culture and not showing your culture respect then you should have a problem. Opponents would imply that "everyone should participate only in their culture and no one else's because they represent the culture to be made to look bad." However they fail to see that if someone is respecting your culture and loves to represent your culture with respect, you should allow them. Don't deny someone their right to express themselves. Ultimately, one culture should allow another person from a different culture to use the elements of their culture, only if they are trying to be fashionable and not mimicking it. The purpose is to allow people to express themselves as long as they are not downgrading the culture they are trying to represent.
Angel Crawford
8/31/2017 09:21:41 pm
REVISED
Crystal Walker
8/31/2017 08:51:02 am
A young boys dressed up as (Maui) a character featured in the movie, Moana.The costume features a brown-colored shirt and pants replicating the character’s tattooed skin. This costume causes an uproar because Polynesian's are offended that their culture is just being worn as a costume. However, what if a girl dresses up as Pocahontas and with her costume shares with others the history of Native Americans and how she wears her costume to symbolize strength, is she not correctly appropriating their culture? It is the writers estimation that to appropriate one's culture correctly is to embrace it not to mimic it. To begin, according to the writers personal experience, there are people that are amazed by other people's cultures and wants to praise it, not take it as their own. This evidence affirms that a culture can be correctly appropriated. If a person wants to practice things attached to a culture knowing what it's true meaning, how is the person just mimicking the culture. If a person wants to praise a culture so much to where that person learns and tries to appropriate the culture, why show them hate. Additionally, the writer has observed multiple friendships of people in different cultures. This shows that people can respect and admire other people's cultures. Someone can show a person that they love their culture and that person can be taught about that culture. A person could teach their friend about the history of Bantu knots or corn rows. Opponents would imply that, " There is no such thing as a "correct" way to appropriate someone's culture." However, they fail to see that a person wants to model their culture because they are fond of it. Nobody should be told that they can not do something from someone's culture because they are not of that same ethnicity of that person. It is wrong to tell someone of other another ethnicity that they can not do something inspired from our culture because they're not black, and just to assume that they're mimicking our culture. It is also wrong to label another person who wants braids or corn rows by saying that they're trying to act black or another race. How about we try to not get so defensive and open our minds and see that not every person is trying to offend our culture. The writers meaning of correctly appropriating is to understand what your appropriating from a culture and use it not to mimic the culture, or just for fashion. The cultural piece should instead be embraced and recognition should he showed. Consequently, the authors purpose is embracing ones culture correctly is to embrace it and not to disrespect it. The authors purpose is to convince the opposing side that culture can be correctly appropriated.
Ayanna Prather
9/1/2017 07:02:16 pm
Hey Crystal! For your exigency, the first part about the boy dressed as Maui is okay, but it could be better. I believe that you are saying as long as a person is educated on the culture, they are embracing it correct? I kind of wish you'd have a stronger exigency. I understand what you are saying perfectly. I suggest a different analogy. I for one know you personally and I know you often don't see why people of other cultures can't wear braids. You should use the analogy of a girl just getting her hair braided to her liking and it being a problem and use the same format of " Oh, since she is educated on braids is she appropriating correctly now!?" Get sassy in your paper. I want to see your emotions come through. Convince me that any white girl can wear their hair the way they want or in this case if they are educated! Add a question mark after "how is it appropriating" and "why show them hate." In your second piece of evidence, specify what you mean by "multiple friendships of people in different cultures." I know you mean people of different cultures are friends, have great bonds. Specify in a way to connect this back to your claim. Other then that, A stronger exigency can really drive this argument. Nice Job. Love the ending. Keep up the good work!
Crystal Walker
9/1/2017 09:00:04 pm
Jhamaya Gettridge
8/31/2017 08:59:40 am
Culture can most definitely be stolen. On july of 2015, a photo was posted in a magazine. In the photo was a fare toned African American female. Her baby hair was all swirly and dolled up. In the credits section for the photo it stated “Vanessa is wearing the new baby hair trend inspired by Katy Perry". Katy Perry is receiving credit for a hairstyle that has been around for ages in the black culture. Not only is it disrespectful that Katy perry, a white woman is getting credit for a black woman's hairstyle, but the fact the hairstyle is displayed on a black woman and she didn't get any praise. They basically only used her to show Katy perry even more praise. Katy Perry obviously appreciated the hairstyle. But she also obviously let her appreciation turn to appropriation of a culture that doesn't belong to her. She passed the appreciation line when she continued to let people give her praise for something she didn't create. She did not once give thanks to the black community for creating such an obviously beautiful trend. That's basically just like stealing our (black women) culture.
Angel Crawford
9/1/2017 10:26:22 pm
I like where you're going with this but your first sentence is not worded scholarly like. I would also advice to not start your response off that way. I would start it off with the second sentence instead. You're definitely not following the template. Follow the template because Dr. Attis may take off points. Again, please be mindful of the choice of words you use, such as basically. Make sure to give more than one data and warrant for each of your data.
Christiana Smith
8/31/2017 10:30:13 am
To Appropriate one's culture is not to embrace it, but to mimic it. It's making a FASHION of someone else's heritage and religion. Recently I was on Instagram and came across a post of Kylie Jenner in cornrows. "She's a queen" "Omg amazing". The problem is that when An African American women where's her natural hair, or natural hairstyles it's considered inappropriate or unattractive. When a Female of European descent Does the exact same thing it's Stylish and cool. Little do they know Cornrows originated in Africa and in the Caribbean. They are setting "New Fashion trends" ..That've been here for decades.. Many People Disregard the faults of celebrities and tend to make preposterous excuses as to why cultural appropriation is okay. In my view Cultural appropriation is utterly Erroneous (Wrong). Borrowing ideas,Listening to songs, Learning about another culture is fine. Nowadays Everything is a social trend, Dashikis; Bantuknots, Indian hair accessories,etc. People often misrepresent traditions that for all you know could be sacred to a group. While opponents argue vehemently that this is a free country and people may do whatever they please. I Abousouletley disagree.
Tasheirra Sanders
9/1/2017 06:22:41 pm
You don't have an exigency, add one. I don't see your second evidence, if it's there, add a transition so that the reader knows its your evidence.You didn't finish your counter claim, tell why you disagree or tell why they're wrong. Add your conclusion and purpose; restate your claim and tell what you want people to do after reading your response.
Kemani kenneybrew
8/31/2017 05:52:30 pm
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